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on the first day
god told the planets to swirl around their orbits
and they swirl in my head

making me dizzy
flabbergasted
and dazed

when I try to figure out
the dark of eternity.






on the second
he added a mole on the witch's nose
to prove to his baby lambs
that grass isn't always as green
and the lambs have fallen

asleep
as it was an evening fairytale
with oval-shaped
unicorn horns
and laddered-towers

for the prince

and maybe they shouldn't.







on the third day
he sat
in a rocking chair

in a house brick-red in colour

near the fireplace and porcelain
tableware with one plate chipped
in that place when its floral ornament starts
just like roses climbing on the wall of his house.
and when they slipped
into the room through the open window

they immersed
into his afternoon cup

gaining the colour of tea






on the day that was meant to be the fourth
he made the water

fall


and the sun

rise


and the rain

bow


in the seven stripes

of joy that divided the sky
in two







on the fifth day he was fatigued
and his quickened breath blew the snow

off the sharp cloud-capped crags
so he laid himself on the carpet of moss
and it became softer

under the touch of his fingertips
and forest ants hollowed out underground corridors
along the lines of his fingerprint.






on the sixth day
he sank in his own shape stamped in the sand
and called the water by its name.

stupid water obeyed the order
and it sails there and

away
to this day.
waiting for the daddy
and when the stupid father doesn't come

it frowns its sea-foam forehead
and destroys sand castles

made by the children whose feet it encounters.






and in the end
on the seventh day

he laid himself
on the clouds of celestial

and became the birdsong
sung by Lady Bird.
now he doesn't weigh more
than the Lady's
spots.

In the number of seven.
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I'd love to read your comment because your opinion is very important to me. Thank you in advance.:worship:


“Birdsong” theme by the one and only: :iconmercury-the-queen:
My vision of the world's creation.
To be accurate: whether you call it ladybird or ladybug it’s always that winged creature with dots on it.:iconladybugplz:
Coccinella septempunctata – a seven-spot ladybird very popular in Europe.;)
English is not my mother tongue – feel free to correct any mistakes!
Thank you for reading.:D
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1. :iconroger-the-elfin-soul: Azure.[link]
2. :iconshygirl04320: Flowers.
3. :iconkittyailla: Stork.
4. :iconlittlemayniac: Butterflies. [link]
5. :iconnightsandtailsfan: Blossom.[link]
6. :iconl-rickman-depp: Hayfever.[link]
7.:iconpris-shadow: Lambs.
8.:iconmercury-the-queen: Birdsong.[link]
9.:iconjrotcchristian: Roses.
10.:iconcaspisan: Life.
11. :iconshadowflame2a: Warm.
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~Ricardo-Orozco Mar 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
well certainly astonishing. well written. :)
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:iconpen-and-mouse:
Thank you so much! :star: I'm very happy to hear your opinion. :giggle:
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~Ricardo-Orozco Mar 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
my pleasure I have yet to read your other masterpieces :)
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:iconpen-and-mouse:
I haven't been writing much lately.. but I do hope to change that! :D I mostly do it at nights and these are just tangled thoughts that wouldn't be any understandable for the potential reader. :XD:
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~Ricardo-Orozco Mar 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
yes! writing is exciting and is pure emotion, write when you feel empowering : ) I'll try my best to understand hahah :)
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:iconpen-and-mouse:
Hehe, good to know..;) Who knows, I may surprise you and my other watchers with some new poems soon =P
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~Ricardo-Orozco Mar 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
can't wait :)
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~ctromedea Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Is so touching :love:... If I had to say something for my poetry class about this poem... "It has involved so many feelings that the author wants to send to the reader. Even the rhyme is special!" :heart:
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:iconpen-and-mouse:
It means a WORLD to me you took your time to read it! :heart:

Thank you for the beautiful comment, my lovely. :thanks: :huggle:
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