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My name is Agatha and I'm eight years old. I live in a countryside and I never expected my life would change so dramatically.
That morning I went to the henhouse to feed my chickens. I was about to come to the henhouse when suddenly I heard a voice from the henhouse. I looked inside the building and couldn't believe in what I saw. One of the chickens was staying on hay and talking to other chickens which were gathered round him. He was wearing glasses and his voice was very screechy. I opened the door and fainted.
When I woke up I saw an ugly woman and chickens gathered round her. My hands were bounded. The woman said to me "Hi, Agatha!".  "Why do you know my name? Who you are?!" I asked. "Come with me!" she said and pulled me with herself.
We were walking through a long, dark corridor but suddenly she stopped. There was a big door. She opened it with one of the countless keys hanging on her neck (I still don't know how it's possible to choose the right one so immediately – there was about fifteen keys and each was the same!). She hustled me into a big room. "Well" she said "that's my plan: I'm going to construct an army of hen-robots and take over the world! HAHAHAHAHA!" she laughed with a scary voice. "Will you help me, Agatha?" – she asked. "No, I won't!" I replied "You're a bad woman!". I was running as fast as I could. I managed to escaped from the room and I was in the corridor again. Suddenly I bumped into something.
When I woke up I saw an white dove as big as a human over my face. "AAAAA!" I was screaming "Who you are?!"." I'm here to help you" she replied with a nice, gentle voice. I calmed down and asked what happened. She told me that she found me lying on the ground and she carried me here. "Why do you live there?" I asked. "I don't have any choice. Only you can save us!". She seemed to be very sad and I felt I needed to help her. I don't know why, but I  didn't asked any other question. I just thanked her for help and went back to the corridor.
I was walking through the corridor for about two hours. I was terribly thirsty. Suddenly I saw a small window. I opened it and saw that woman. That woman who tried to encourage me to help her to take over the world. I jumped to the room through the window and shouted "I caught you! You're confined there!!!". "NOOOOOOOO!" screamed the woman. Suddenly she changed into a black hen and flew away through another window. I fainted.
When I woke up I realized that was only a nightmare.
A story written at the age of 8. I was inspired by my lovely rooster.. fav.me/d4l5fux :heart:

I actually considered that thing a book (thanks to my enormous childish hand-writing :XD:)

Me and my (then) best friend were trying to save some money to publish it. We REALLY thought we could earn a fortune…:lol:

Phenomenal beginning, bloodcurdling plot and suprising finale. That’s what a reader should expect from a book.



Chickens can be dangerous. They really can.

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DogmaticKerr Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is just... too cute and too adorable :lmao: What a view into the the innocence and simplicity of a child's mind and dreams. This is just the cutest :love:
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Pen-and-mouse Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2013
Thank you for your constructive comment on one of my earliest creations. ;P :thanks: I was a.. weird kid, to say the least. But I'm glad you enjoyed. ;) :heart:
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DogmaticKerr Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome miss! :lmao: It really was an adorable story :heart: And no worries, I remember what it was like myself and I have to say that I am glad you were, glad you are and glad that you are as wonderful as you are now for all of it :heart:
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Pen-and-mouse Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2013
The little Charles? :giggle: That must have been so adorable. :heart:

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DogmaticKerr Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ohmygosh, no way! I am so glad that pictures do not exist from the epoch! What an awkward little dude ;D My parents had me wearing what was the equivalent of daisy dukes for a little while back then - AND MY HAIR! :faint: Oh no! No no no no no! :faint:

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Pen-and-mouse Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2013
Aww.... NOW I'd just LOVE to see the little Charles! ;P :evillaugh: :saddummy:

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DogmaticKerr Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Aahahahah! :lmao: Oh my, I bet you would ;D And I do dearly wish that I could show you ^.^ My parents, however, were never big on pictures so very little exists from my youth (or any other time, really) and absolutely none of it exists digitally! :faint:
I was such a weirdo.
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Pen-and-mouse Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2013
Ooh, what a shame! :noes: Well then, everything's left to my imagination now.. :giggle: :evillaugh:
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mayankismad Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Wow, that was so emotional :happycry:.. hehe you have a great imagination Zuzanna.. I'm glad it was just a nightmare, otherwise Zel the Rooster would be ruling over me :D.. Still I find it good work for your age back then :heart:
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Pen-and-mouse Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2012
Haha, indeed.:D Thank you, I'm quite imaginative, I think.:XD:
Hahaha.=P I like looking at my old writings... they always make me smile.:happycry: I'm going to post some of my poems (written as child) soon because I managed to translate them and keep the rhymes.:)
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mayankismad Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Wow that's nice.. I'll wait for them to be uploaded :D
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Pen-and-mouse Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2012
Nice to hear that... now I only have to take some photos of them (yeah, that lack of scanner:X) 'cause I think that this childish handwriting adds some more effect and refine the translations.:)
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mayankismad Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Good I'll love to see that effect now..
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Pen-and-mouse Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2012
Be patient, my dear..;)
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mayankismad Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Yes, I'm waiting :D
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Pen-and-mouse Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2012
:squee:
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QueenZep Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2012  Student General Artist
if only i had a dream half as awesome :)
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Pen-and-mouse Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2012
:giggle:
Thank you for faving!;)
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Roger-The-Elfin-Soul Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2012
:D That reminds me of chicken stories I wrote when about 10...
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Pen-and-mouse Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2012
Awesome!:la:Do you remember what was the stories about?:giggle:
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Roger-The-Elfin-Soul Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2012
Yeah, I have it all written down :giggle:
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Pen-and-mouse Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2012
Have you posted it somewhere on DA?
If not, could post it? Of course if you don't want to that's ok, I'm just curios...:giggle:
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Roger-The-Elfin-Soul Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2012
Sure I haven't, it's so childish and silly. :blush:

I don't think posting chicken stories would be a good thing to do for a 17 yrs old guy, am I right? ;)
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Pen-and-mouse Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2012
Ahh, you're right:XD:
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LittleMayniac Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Hahaha, that's cute :XD:
I remember in class, when I was also 8, we had to write a love story that didn't work out, but I don't quite remember what happened. :XD:
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Pen-and-mouse Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2012
Thanks:XD:
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LittleMayniac Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Welcome! :XD:
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Mercury-the-Queen Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2012
This is wonderful!:XD: Now I want a black hen... :lol:
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Pen-and-mouse Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2012
Thank you:XD:
Once I saw a black hen. I was in the mall and I went to the pet shop. The hen was walking on the floor. She wasn't even in a cage. That was really weird. I nearly trampled her...:XD:
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Mercury-the-Queen Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2012
You are welcome. It really is a lovely story. :giggle:
WHAT!? A hen in the mall!? :XD: That's awesome!
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Pen-and-mouse Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2012
That was indeed very awesome...:giggle:
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MandyMullins2 Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2012
Wow, that sounds like a really weird dream! :giggle:
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Pen-and-mouse Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2012
Yeah, really weird:giggle: I wrote the second part too but I can't find it anywhere...:( I remember there was a girl named May an she turned out to be "the bad woman's" daughter. She became Agatha's best friend. They were both fighting against the flying chickens(and they met some "good" chickens too)...:XD: Actually that wasn't my dream, I just made up this story. But my real dreams can be really weird. I saw Freddie in a dream once. Freddie from 70s. I remember only the fact that he was singing and I was about to faint:giggle:(faint while dreaming... cool:lol:). And once I was dreaming I took part in a kind of competition. With Brian on my right, and Roger on the left. And we had to sing the whole "Death on two legs" without any mistakes. We won!!!:woohoo:
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MandyMullins2 Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2012
Oh wow! I've come up with stories from dreams before ^^. I came up with a story about a hidden room filled entirely with dolls (it came from a recurring dream, which happened more than once).
Ooh I want to have a Freddie dream! I might have had one before, but I can't remember it. I want to have one I can remember!
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Pen-and-mouse Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2012
OH MY GOD!!!
I saw this room!:wow:
When I lived in Oświęcim(Auschwitz in German - maybe you heard about it) there was a really old building. I usually passed it and didn't pay much attention to it but one day I looked at the window and saw... lots of dolls... One of them where staying with her hands raised like she wanted to take over the world or something like that:XD: They were all very beautiful(and looked very old) but kinda creepy...
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MandyMullins2 Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2012
Oh wow! In my story the doll room was pretty much underground (through an opening in sort of a window seat). It's strange, but the funny thing is I'd stopped having the dream by the time I wrote the story :giggle:
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Pen-and-mouse Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2012
Have you posted this story on DA?:) I'd love to read it...:giggle:
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MandyMullins2 Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2012
Ahh no...it really doesn't work without pictures :blush:
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Pen-and-mouse Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2012
That's ok:)
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canyoudothefandango Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
ahaha this is great :XD: I remember at school when I was 7 I wrote a story that had EVERYTHING in it- dragons,lions,me,my friends,animals-everything! :XD:
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Pen-and-mouse Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2012
Thanks:XD:
Cool!:la:
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