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My name is Agatha and I'm eight years old. I live in a countryside and I never expected my life would change so dramatically.
That morning I went to the henhouse to feed my chickens. I was about to come to the henhouse when suddenly I heard a voice from the henhouse. I looked inside the building and couldn't believe in what I saw. One of the chickens was staying on hay and talking to other chickens which were gathered round him. He was wearing glasses and his voice was very screechy. I opened the door and fainted.
When I woke up I saw an ugly woman and chickens gathered round her. My hands were bounded. The woman said to me "Hi, Agatha!".  "Why do you know my name? Who you are?!" I asked. "Come with me!" she said and pulled me with herself.
We were walking through a long, dark corridor but suddenly she stopped. There was a big door. She opened it with one of the countless keys hanging on her neck (I still don't know how it's possible to choose the right one so immediately – there was about fifteen keys and each was the same!). She hustled me into a big room. "Well" she said "that's my plan: I'm going to construct an army of hen-robots and take over the world! HAHAHAHAHA!" she laughed with a scary voice. "Will you help me, Agatha?" – she asked. "No, I won't!" I replied "You're a bad woman!". I was running as fast as I could. I managed to escaped from the room and I was in the corridor again. Suddenly I bumped into something.
When I woke up I saw an white dove as big as a human over my face. "AAAAA!" I was screaming "Who you are?!"." I'm here to help you" she replied with a nice, gentle voice. I calmed down and asked what happened. She told me that she found me lying on the ground and she carried me here. "Why do you live there?" I asked. "I don't have any choice. Only you can save us!". She seemed to be very sad and I felt I needed to help her. I don't know why, but I  didn't asked any other question. I just thanked her for help and went back to the corridor.
I was walking through the corridor for about two hours. I was terribly thirsty. Suddenly I saw a small window. I opened it and saw that woman. That woman who tried to encourage me to help her to take over the world. I jumped to the room through the window and shouted "I caught you! You're confined there!!!". "NOOOOOOOO!" screamed the woman. Suddenly she changed into a black hen and flew away through another window. I fainted.
When I woke up I realized that was only a nightmare.
A story written at the age of 8. I was inspired by my lovely rooster.. fav.me/d4l5fux :heart:

I actually considered that thing a book (thanks to my enormous childish hand-writing :XD:)

Me and my (then) best friend were trying to save some money to publish it. We REALLY thought we could earn a fortune…:lol:

Phenomenal beginning, bloodcurdling plot and suprising finale. That’s what a reader should expect from a book.



Chickens can be dangerous. They really can.

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DogmaticKerr Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is just... too cute and too adorable :lmao: What a view into the the innocence and simplicity of a child's mind and dreams. This is just the cutest :love:
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Pen-and-mouse Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2013
Thank you for your constructive comment on one of my earliest creations. ;P :thanks: I was a.. weird kid, to say the least. But I'm glad you enjoyed. ;) :heart:
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DogmaticKerr Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome miss! :lmao: It really was an adorable story :heart: And no worries, I remember what it was like myself and I have to say that I am glad you were, glad you are and glad that you are as wonderful as you are now for all of it :heart:
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Pen-and-mouse Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2013
The little Charles? :giggle: That must have been so adorable. :heart:

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DogmaticKerr Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ohmygosh, no way! I am so glad that pictures do not exist from the epoch! What an awkward little dude ;D My parents had me wearing what was the equivalent of daisy dukes for a little while back then - AND MY HAIR! :faint: Oh no! No no no no no! :faint:

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Pen-and-mouse Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2013
Aww.... NOW I'd just LOVE to see the little Charles! ;P :evillaugh: :saddummy:

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DogmaticKerr Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Aahahahah! :lmao: Oh my, I bet you would ;D And I do dearly wish that I could show you ^.^ My parents, however, were never big on pictures so very little exists from my youth (or any other time, really) and absolutely none of it exists digitally! :faint:
I was such a weirdo.
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Pen-and-mouse Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2013
Ooh, what a shame! :noes: Well then, everything's left to my imagination now.. :giggle: :evillaugh:
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mayankismad Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Wow, that was so emotional :happycry:.. hehe you have a great imagination Zuzanna.. I'm glad it was just a nightmare, otherwise Zel the Rooster would be ruling over me :D.. Still I find it good work for your age back then :heart:
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Pen-and-mouse Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2012
Haha, indeed.:D Thank you, I'm quite imaginative, I think.:XD:
Hahaha.=P I like looking at my old writings... they always make me smile.:happycry: I'm going to post some of my poems (written as child) soon because I managed to translate them and keep the rhymes.:)
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